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    dots Submission Name: When Lilacs Come in Bloomdots
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    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       My grandfather died as a result of a tragic auto/truck accident a couple years before I was born. In this poem, "I" is my grandfather speaking from the grave to his children about caring for their mother. Grandma's birthday was June 14 and she loved lilacs. Since I never knew this grandfather, I reflected on things my mother has told me about him while writing this tribute to his love for my grandmother. It seemed an appropriate write as Mother's Day approaches and I hope it will remind us all how fleeting time can be.


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    dotsWhen Lilacs Come in Bloomdots
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    If I could have the gift of time, I'd pick a fresh bouquet;
    And, over breakfast tea and toast, what loving words I'd say!
    That lazy summer day had been a bummer from the start;
    An argument had lead astray the passions of my heart.
    My lifelong dreams have met their end; the crash came suddenly,
    And, now, the touch of death's cold arms have spun their tragedy.
    My children, as you face my grave, just know that love goes on;
    Please kiss your mom and hug her tight until her days are gone.
    Her fragrance fills my memories when lilacs come in bloom;
    What precious thoughts I carry deep within soul's hidden room.





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       Very nice. A lot of your poetry ha a hymn-like quality and I particularly enjoyed the rhythm of this one as I followed along with the story. There's a lovely balance of laughter, adventure and romance in this so that I found it an enjoyable and touching piece.

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    | Posted on 2009-01-24 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow....i love this!

    what a wonderful and heartwarming idea this is .....yes, you very rightly felt that this is a reminder of how fleeting time can be and that we should make the most of it and make up for those who have left others to cope with their loneliness.

    A nice, inspirational write-up which I truly enjoyed reading. good work



    | Posted on 2008-07-12 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very touching and I know how you feel - I never knew any of my grandfathers but have thought about them in a poetic sense.

    This just brings a down-home & intimate feeling to the piece - wonderful as usual!

    How's the garden growing? I've got some nice morning glorys blooming and I have poppies and sunflowers from seed in my mini-greenhouse! I love "IT"!!!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      What a loving and excellent memorial to your Grandfather! I'm sure he is smiling down on you as this is read, and happy that he is thought of and remembered! Excellent timing for a memorial, as Lilacs are so gorgeous and fragrant, and are here for only a short time.
    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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