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    dots Submission Name: Right Decisionsdots
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    Author: Strator
    ASL Info:    22/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160/142/67
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsRight Decisionsdots
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    Like the lonely winter tree
    Outstretched branches with never any leaves
    Lonely skeletons, with lonely smiles
    Looking away while trying to hide
    Their outstretched lonely eyes

    Lonely is how I feel
    Can you tell?
    The right decisions we make
    Or the wrong ones are a never ending battle
    How do you choose, how do you decide?

    These harsh cold dead fingers peeling off the blood flow
    How do you stop
    How do you recognize
    What can't we realize is, the right decision is hard
    The wrong decision is calling our name

    Were lost in this universe,
    thats more frightening than fear,
    Were lost in the Earth,
    Where i feel as if nothing is near,
    I am Lost as a person, Lost as man,
    Needing to find myself, but i dont think i can.

    Were lost to all feeling, that is felt inside,
    Were lost to the sea, and its longing tide,
    I am lost to the people who really care,
    All these people, never lost but always there.

    Were lost somewhere, all alone,
    Lost with the world, and its pityful moan,
    I am lost in love, lost in hate,
    Just waiting for a chance to make it right....

    I am lost for words, that i should say,
    I am feeling sorry, but how can I stay,
    I am lost for thoughts, even when i pray,
    Lost in mind, lost in hope,
    Help me lord, i cannot cope...

    What is the Right Decision?




    Submitted on 2008-05-05 08:25:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This piece was just very poignant to me on a lot of personal levels...I've recently found out that a man I used to date is suffering mental issues from prolonged use of acid and I've had some ongoing family issues that made me feel this same way. I love that it is not an angry cry out as much as a prayer.
    I, too, have suffered and I only wish to share with you that there are the times that polarize these. Hang in there friend.
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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