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    dots Submission Name: My Good Frienddots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.83 - 262/263/207
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 113
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 699



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    dotsMy Good Frienddots
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    It seems weird now
    when I give you a hug
    and wish to kiss your lips.
    I can't wait until you hold me,
    tight in your arms.
    You swing me around,
    like you haven't seen me
    in years.
    Every love song I sing,
    I have you in my mind.
    I don't care
    what no one will have to say.
    I only care
    what you think.
    The problem is,
    I don't know what you think.
    Do I read more
    into the hug you give me?
    When you hold me?
    When you look at me?
    I feel something,
    when you're alone with me.
    My good friend,
    tell me,
    how do you feel?




    Submitted on 2008-05-05 11:04:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ahh..the feeling of love. So sweet...as long as it is received back. This was very true and very easy to visualize, but it wasn't...I don't know how to word it...it didn't stick in the mind very long. Not much originality to it, I guess you could say. It was nice to read because I have those same feelings when I am with the one I love. He the most wonderful to be around and this poem was easy to connect to with that. It was a nice read, but I felt more could be added.

    Nice Job.
    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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