"My Shadow And Me" by Ron Cole

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Author:	Ron Cole
Elite Ratio:	3.78 - 1667/1121/181
Words:	63

Class/Type:	Poetry/Romance
Total Views:	130
Average Vote:	5.0000
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"My Shadow And Me" dots

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What fun we have,
my Shadow and me!
He's my companion and friend
when there's light to see!

He's somber when I walk,
and playful when I run!
My Shadow and me
always have fun!

Then you came along
and now there are three;
there's you on my arm,
and our Shadow and we!

Ron Cole
May 2008

Submitted on 2008-05-05 12:01:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  From what I know about your success track with women, you must have run this game more than once compadre!!!!!!!!!
| Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  Suggestion: Could you make...

Then you came along
and now there are three;
there's you on my arm,
and our Shadow and we!

Then you came along
and now there are three;
there is you on my arm,
our shadow and we!

The extra and seems unnecasary, but , I guess, you may have it there for poetic effect.

It is a cute little poem. Bouncy, playful, sweet. It flows, and that's great. It seems to slide right off my tongue as if it had skates. Good job!

~xoxo~
Sweets
| Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah, cute and funny, indeed! A well done piece reminding my of something Robert Louis Stevenson wrote... bravo... bravo... bravo...
| Posted on 2008-05-07 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  happy, playful, very spring/summer style
I very much appreciated the fact that for something of a love poem it wasnt too gushy or any thing like that.

well written, articulate.
peace
| Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed this sweet and simple poem, Ron.
We'll always have our shadows, and it's a good thing to have another added to ours.
The way I read the last word to myself was more "wheee!" than "we". (silly!)
Thanks for sharing another delightful read.

| Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a nice happy poem, I like it. Its good and short. One may think that you work for
Hall Mark.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  What a delightful poem to read on a sunny day! It makes me want to grab hubby's arm and take a walk to make shadows of our own. Good job, Sharon :-)
| Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

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