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    dots Submission Name: Got To Stop Thisdots
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    Author: Goddess Of Love
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Me
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    dotsGot To Stop Thisdots
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    You've got to stop this girl,
    Losing your temper so easily,
    Arguing over anything,
    You've lost who you used to be.

    Yes we all get depressed,
    Yes we sometimes feel insecure,
    But theres no need to act the way you do,
    You've turned immature.

    He loves you so much,
    And has always stood by your side,
    I know you have trust issues,
    But you need to stop this for sure.

    Just believe what he says.
    Stop thinking he is going to break your heart,
    Stop all this hatred,
    How about a new start?

    1st May 08




    Submitted on 2008-05-05 19:17:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      To begin, I like the form of the stanzas and the format of the piece. It feels like something you'd rarely see in much of the writings.

    The Grammar as well is just as good as the format.

    I wouldn't say there is much to change, it's just as good as it should be as it is right now, but this is my opinion.

    It's just such a heart-touching piece, I do wonder however after reading this, why do we argue?

    I've got to say, this might be one piece i will never get over with. It feels just like how life is when one feels to comfortable with one thing to find it in some other perspective.
    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Guild Puppet | [ Reply to This ]


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