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    dots Submission Name: suicidedots
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    Author: kairi bloom
    Elite Ratio:    1.48 - 9/40/28
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 218
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    You walk into the darkness of the night
    The creepy footsteps fill you with fright
    You turn around and no-ones there
    If you died nobody would care

    You hear something behind you get torn
    Now you wish you were never born
    What is that thing that you cannot see?
    Why that invisible thing, that is me

    I have a knife in my hand
    From my shirt, drips the sand
    I have come from the beach
    My last words from my speech

    Were I love you, before I died
    Before I committed suicide
    Now I sit there and wait
    To hurt you back, it is your fate





    Submitted on 2008-05-06 03:40:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow I really like this. Ecspecailly the last stanza. The creepy feeling you portray really dragged me into the poem, to the point of imagination. I was watching this happen in my mind as I read it. It was a very well written. ^_^

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    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by Kat Tudor | [ Reply to This ]



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