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    dots Submission Name: A Choredots
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    Author: Temperance Ayse
    ASL Info:    17 / F / Aus
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 290
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 787
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1792



    Description:
       Just a little something I came up with a few years ago. I was going through a really bad part of my life and this was just the result of one boring night. It holds a place in my heart


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    dotsA Choredots
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    Everyone around, tries to look below

    To understand my pain, the hurt they'll never know

    Pulled around on strings, like a puppet made of wood

    Doing as Im told, just like a puppet should

    "Keep a pretty face", "Wear a sunny smile"

    "Keep the tears at bay", and yet all the while

    I fight to keep on going, I fight to find a way

    To clmib out of this bed, to live each single day

    I know its getting harder, and really I do try

    I cannot help but wonder, and ask this lifetime why?

    Why keep on going? Why try at all?

    Cause everytime I try, I only seem to fall

    Sure Ive got my friends, and my family aswell

    But no-one understands, no matter who I tell

    They claim it's all a lie, that I could feel this way

    Cause I'm a perfect daughter, who never goes astray

    So I quickly hide it all, to stop their prying eyes

    Midnight comes, comforts me, and hears all my cries

    Whats a girl to do, when all she's ever known,

    Slowly turns against her, and a normal girl is shown

    A girl who's not so pretty, or even popular

    And has a single friend, who only goes so far

    A girl who is intimidating, and everyone despised

    That never kept a boyfriend, because she smiply tried

    And everything she did, she tried her very best

    And yet this girl was still, the butt of every jest

    Yet she's stronger now, and smiling more

    For this girl now, living isnt a chore




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      WOW! Temeperance your a pretty good writer hmm hmm! WEll, keep on writing this was excellent! Well, i'm off for school now so ill talk to you later...Well, sometime you better PM me..You and I had a RP together i believe it was -For SaeKatnear-.
    | Posted on 2008-09-19 00:00:00 | by SaeKatnear | [ Reply to This ]


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