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    Author: Keaton Volkov
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 22/17/13
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 612
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    Description:
       This is one of two poems I've written for that special someone. I'll post the other one soon-ish.


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    Take my hand, my angel,
    And today we'll waltz through the park.
    Take a look at that tree and its majestic branches.
    Are they not like us?
    I am the tree and you are the branch.
    Without you, I am ugly,
    Just a shell of a thing with no one to share my life with.
    I was made to hold you tightly;
    To support you throughout the years;
    To give you life and to help you grow.
    And you were made to be my other half,
    The more beautiful of us two,
    Without my love, you would surely starve;
    Without yours, I have nothing to live for.
    Please, dear, be my branch.




    Submitted on 2008-05-06 11:57:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very beautiful poem. I like how you took something that is not normally used to describe and love relationship, and wrote a poem about it. The wording was simple and to the point, which is a good thing in my opinion. The message was very respectful and sweet.

    ~Jenn
    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by scarz | [ Reply to This ]


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