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    dots Submission Name: Samanthadots
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    Author: Keaton Volkov
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 22/17/13
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 545
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    dotsSamanthadots
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    I am in love?

    I would be hard-pressed to say that I am not.

    For never have I felt such emotion toward another creature.

    Never has my stomach churned upon seeing her angelic face.

    Never before has my flesh crawled upon hearing her majestic voice.

    Never have my dogged eyes been so tenacious in following the actions of another creature.

    This must be love, must it not?

    But we cannot know each other!

    Such an angelic creature…she could never be forced to live with my ogreish mannerisms.

    Perhaps, my beloved, my contemptible ways can be tolerated.

    But, where we are, is it right?





    Submitted on 2008-05-06 15:44:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It conveys a lot of feeling. I like your word usage. It isn't just 'cute' its 'deep'. And thats neat.

    However, honestly, it just doesn't say 'poetry' to me. It just doesn't have that flow. You know?

    It is an excellent free form writing, and I like it.

    Good job.

    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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