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    dots Submission Name: When You Were Youngdots
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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 105/106/76
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhen You Were Youngdots
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    You pour yourself out on the pages,
    Your heart is full of empty rages.
    I've watched you ruin yourself before,
    I can't let this happen anymore.
    The coffee keeps hands steady, to not give you away.
    With your defenses shattered, you bow your head to pray.
    The world has left you broken
    Scars that time can't heal.
    With every word unspoken,
    Your faith is all that's real.
    Broken dreams and empty promises, memories of love,
    Keep you wishing for those times;
    the times when you were young.




    Submitted on 2008-05-06 20:37:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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