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    dots Submission Name: Cramping my Own Styledots
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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 105/106/76
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCramping my Own Styledots
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    Sitting on the sidewalk, I think too heavily to smile.
    My head is throbbing, and my eyes are red from crying.
    It's become my trademark, my own style,
    To get broken and lose hope, to lose myself for a while.

    But now I'll rip out the pages of my life that don't mean anything.
    I'll jam to old albums and remember how to breathe.
    I'll keep those memories playing,to remind me who I was.
    I'll finally dance in front of the mirror, if only just because.




    Submitted on 2008-05-06 20:43:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there's something i really like about this...it's getting back to knowing who you really are! self-awareness is essential and you really painted a good picture here! i really liked the rhyme scheme and this part...
    "It's become my trademark, my own style,
    To get broken and lose hope, to lose myself for a while"

    trademark...style...losing myself for a while...perfectly said
    and this was maybe my fav part
    "I'll finally dance in front of the mirror, if only just because"

    very well done, thnx for sharing
    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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