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All Redemption

Author: forfila
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All Redemption

I push on accompanied by the spirit of the father
A pale figure on horse back with active spirits I harbor
Before I return home I roam slipped from Nirvana
Cast your heart upon my path, it's misty but right
Cast your eyes upon my language, view through the night
Slide with the current of my wave, take pains to the fire
Take aim aside the Messiah, one love and one hope
As one we ride to all redemption.

Submitted on 2008-05-06 20:55:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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