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    dots Submission Name: All Redemptiondots
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    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAll Redemptiondots
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    I push on accompanied by the spirit of the father
    A pale figure on horse back with active spirits I harbor
    Before I return home I roam slipped from Nirvana
    Cast your heart upon my path, it's misty but right
    Cast your eyes upon my language, view through the night
    Slide with the current of my wave, take pains to the fire
    Take aim aside the Messiah, one love and one hope
    As one we ride to all redemption.




    Submitted on 2008-05-06 20:55:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'll look forward to it. Wonderful piece.
    Love and Peace,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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