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    dots Submission Name: addiction....dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsaddiction....dots
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    un my nose
    in my lungs
    down my throat
    a thousand needles
    under my skin
    carving in
    endless
    a rush
    a touch
    heaven
    and half hell
    over and over
    a never ending pain
    over the river
    through the woods
    back and forth
    i can't stop
    its hurting
    yet i still play
    addiction or not
    i can't tell anymore
    again and again
    just one more hit
    an hour later
    just one more
    oh how my life passes by
    so surreal
    spinning out of control
    spun
    then i spit
    i can't stop
    help
    kill me
    i'm killing myself
    over and over
    this war never ends
    its killing time again
    so play a song
    crack and coke
    a story rhyme
    for children in adult bodies
    weed, herion, etc.
    where does it all a stop
    american suicide.....




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very great poem! If I may ask what inspired you to write this?

    Just a little curiouse! Added to my Favs.
    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this. i couldnt help but read it fast for the first time, as it was sort of giving me a rush. most excellent work.
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by Kina Keloid | [ Reply to This ]


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