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    dots Submission Name: Sevendots
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    Author: Dana
    ASL Info:    23/F/Dreamland
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 79/87/26
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 663
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    dotsSevendots
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    Seven heart beats and a minute to go
    My life is slipping through my hands
    As I watch the sand clock on the windowsill
    Seven tears and I break free from all the heartache
    What I have kept in every spot of my heart
    I am in the place where my heart belongs
    Itís like a church where I heal my heart
    Seven steps and I am walking on your skin
    Kissing the trees and the summer breeze
    I hear the whispers calling my name
    You are here with me and nothing else I need
    Memories are burning like flames in my head
    From the moments I have spent in your lap
    Itís been like a sanctuary where I always feel safe
    Seven snowflakes dancing on your face
    They bring me a smile and sow a joy in my heart
    Even in this loneliness which is always near
    Silence keeps me addicted and despair is what I fear
    Every time I am close to you it takes me to new heights
    There is always something that reminds me of you
    It's seven...




    Submitted on 2008-05-07 08:44:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I liked it alot. The emotion was subtle, but there. It flowed nicely and it was a good topic. Nostalgia can do funny things to a person. I'm just glad your reverie was a good one. OH! There was one thing, you spelled "sews" wrong. No harm, no foul. Just letting you know. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2008-05-07 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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