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    dots Submission Name: Your Hasty Executiondots
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    Author: Predator
    ASL Info:    21/m/Derbyshire, England
    Elite Ratio:    7.02 - 257/198/73
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 892
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    Description:
       Last year I went to Poland and this is reflections on that I guess (coupled with Buried in the air)

    Thanks for reading, let me know whatever you think to it


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    dotsYour Hasty Executiondots
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    The steel cage
    and chopping-board tracks
    border the cherry blossom
    and the gallows:
    makeshift; used.
    The firing range
    casts iron-bar shadows,
    framing cell-wall graffiti
    on permanent display.
    The languages of Europe
    meander through the air,
    seeking escape
    through fence-holes, razor-wire,
    and falling leaves,
    finding solace among
    their wind-blown graves.




    Submitted on 2008-05-07 16:32:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece, I like the contrast between the not so beautiful and the pure beauty of the place. Personally I always wanted to visit Poland, I actually have family there but I have never gotten the chance.

    I also like how I couldn't realy see a structure to it, it was more of a description in simple terms. I think thats what a writer has to do sometimes, sit back and write what they see because perspective plays so much of a role and poetry is about making things come alive with meaning.

    And the meaning is the best part. Its painful and its harsh but there is beauty in it.

    So all in all great read and thank you for the comment on my piece a while back.

    ~flora~
    | Posted on 2008-05-17 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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