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Muse Me, Use Me


Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 365 /575 /251
Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Muse Me, Use Me



I can take off the silk shawl
I wrap around my soul,
if you’d like.

I can whore my charm and beauty
to you and your ‘art’.
I could, I would—
and I did.

Well? I was bored.

And you made some decent, amateur shit
out of my premeditated performances—
I always said I was a brilliant actress,
now didn’t I?

Well? I was right.

I have a scheme and a strategy
for every situation
and I take every opportunity to rehearse.

But I don’t mean to brag. I mean,
what could I say?
I’m the best
at what I do.

It’s just another stage, for another night—
just another play.

I’ve done it countless times;
my acting is believable
because it’s true.
So it’s easy to recite the lines,
“Goodbye, you poor fool.
Goodbye—

and fuck you.”





Submitted on 2008-05-07 17:45:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sounds like someone just pricked your finger big time. Emotion is bleeding all over this page and your voice is stronger, though the tone of it is definitely different.

I think the concept of play/acting was used very well. And even though there are some R-rated language everything lends itself to that emotion behind the shawl.

Kudos for coming out of the closet and showing an Angry Side Lucy. On the other hand, I am very afraid for the person or event that merited this write. It sounds like you're plotting something contrary to an embrace even as you sleep.

To all the people who are best at what they do,
Suven!
| Posted on 2008-05-07 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]


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