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    dots Submission Name: The Big Revealdots
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    Author: lynn7
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 296/212/58
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Big Revealdots
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    So, now I know
    Who you really are?
    Why you need me?
    Why you've lied?
    Who holds your soul?
    Why you seek my light?

    Even if our love was true
    How could I ever believe
    Now that I know the truth
    Was all my prays in vain?
    Every time he'd call, you'd turn away
    To follow your own path
    To keep your name

    Considering now I know
    I will not stick around
    To let use use me up
    & leave me for dead
    God knows I would have walked
    To the ends of the earth for you

    The Lord sends you message
    That the time is near..but not to late
    That your invitation is still good
    But he can not make you choose him
    Neither will he try anymore
    Unless you seek him with all your heart
    You will fall with the others

    As far as our dream goes
    Our ship has sailed
    Across a unknown shore
    But don't loose heart
    Keep you head in the clouds
    For even a greater dream
    Is on the horizon..and yet to come




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