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    dots Submission Name: the empty part of the wooddots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe empty part of the wooddots
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    are we married to what we keep
    or do the memories
    just creep up on us
    in our sleep?
    does the content of loss
    stir like the moss
    of always?

    the beast is everywhere
    & the faces that i wear
    hide my secret heart
    from what tears me apart
    only enough to get me by.
    which is why
    i'm still here.

    do all the clever laurels
    that i crowd around your neck
    compel the wreck
    inside your chest
    to continue beating?
    or has all of this deleting
    reminded you of nothing?

    while we become ghosts
    to the living
    & hosts
    to our misgivings
    there's still this part
    within us that survives.
    this peace in knowing
    that some release
    is waiting
    in the empty part of the wood
    we keep inside.




    Submitted on 2008-05-08 04:09:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a very lovely piece. That deep secret part of us that we avoid because we aren't sure we want to know the truth is such a compelling subjet. It's like we unconciously try to block it out, and conciously question why.
    Funny creatures, us humans.
    A billiantly done poem.

    Maddie
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    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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