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    dots Submission Name: "The Night The Angels Cried"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots"The Night The Angels Cried"dots
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    We met one eve in Paris
    when Roses were in bloom.
    We held hands on the Terrace,
    and kissed in the light of the Moon.

    One look at you and suddenly I knew
    that our love was meant to be,
    from the thrill of your touch and your caress
    you were the only girl for me.

    We spent that summer together;
    it was a season of soulful bliss!
    There was heaven in the blue of your eyes,
    and heaven in your kiss.

    You were from the landed gentry;
    a family of power and fame.
    My folks were modest merchants,
    without wealth or famous name.

    But we went so well together
    like our love was meant to be,
    you were going to meet my family
    who lived far across the sea.

    The night we were to leave
    you had walked to the corner store,
    to stock up on some sundries,
    that we couldn't buy offshore.

    I heard a crash then sirens;
    the sound made my blood run cold!
    Your lady was hit by a driver
    who was drunk so I was told!

    That night my dreams were shattered
    the soul within me died!
    That night clouds covered Paris,
    and that night the Angels cried.

    Ron Cole
    February 2008




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      Ron this was a beautiful piece, romance isn't dead yet in this world, just in some hearts.
    You may have noticed, I am not a litterary critic, heck I don't have enought of a vocabulary to be a good writer. BUT I can read and enjoy a good poem or story, I'll let the pretenders be critics and just enoy. Too old to care about the small things in life, LOL
    | Posted on 2011-05-10 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written.
    Just enough detail; not going into too much elaboration, but enough to keep the reader interested.

    It's sad, the fact that she died, I was slightly depressed at the end! You hooked me in, though.


    A very well-placed title.
    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by Wasted | [ Reply to This ]
      Good work, Ron....

    a sad and pathetic mood, ofcourse but well written...very descriptive and beautiful....

    The rhyme was well managed - though I have a suggestion for you that would help to alter the flow of the poem a bit :

    Instead of :

    "We spent that summer together;
    it was a season of soulful bliss!
    There was heaven in the blue of your eyes,
    and heaven in your kiss."

    It could be :

    "We spent that summer together;
    it was a season of soulful bliss!
    There was heaven in blue eyes,
    and heaven in your heartfelt kiss."

    In my opinion, it would do even without the 'heartfelt'..the purpose of adding it is just to introduce alliteration, as in the 2nd line of the same stanza ( 'season', 'soulful' ).

    Otherwise...well written, again.

    Nice work : )

    | Posted on 2008-05-11 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      What a sad and tragic end to a wonderfully romantic summer! Your rhymes worked very well, Ron. This is an excellent poem.

    For me, "Your lady was hit by a driver," would read better as "My lady..." because the rest of the story seems to be written in the first person.

    Enjoyed, :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written and thought out! I enjoyed the story line from love to heartbreak and the rhyme lines that carried clearly throughout.
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      Here is a classic tragic love story, beautifully presented.

    It brought to mind "An Affair to Remember". What a great movie. Although I am bit prejudiced towards Cary Grant!

    Thanks for sharing another heartfelt poem with us!
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG...it's one of the best poems i've ever read!!! it's really amazing..i love it specially this part
    That night my dreams were shattered
    the soul within me died!
    That night clouds covered Paris,
    and that night the Angels cried.

    great job :D
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by mystic_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Suggestion: Could you make...

    who was drunk so I was told

    who was drunk, I was told

    Eh. I don't know. It really is beautiful. A bit 'romantic' for my taste. But, all the same, quite enchanting. I like the first stanza a lot. Great work, and I really do like it. A lot.


    ~xoxo~
    Sweets
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This piece is amazing. I wish I could say more.

    Love and Peace,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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