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    dots Submission Name: Pobrecitadots
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    Author: chonis
    ASL Info:    17/f/CA
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/0/3
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    How long untill her mask shatters completely?
    HOw is it, that when she says:
    "I LOVE TO HATE YOU.",
    she says it so sweetly?
    How is it, that the angry love letters,
    mean everything to me?
    How long will i need her,
    untill I am free?
    Why can't i save her...from herself?
    Why can;t i help her...
    regain mental health/
    Why is she doing this...to us?
    And why the hell...do i meddle and fuss?
    I can't back off,
    I can't give her space.
    I can't let go,
    my actions filled with haste.
    It seems like her demons,
    are more than i can bear.
    So tell me, someone,
    why do I stare?
    How can she hate me,
    when she loves me so much.
    We lose ourselves,
    through bruises and tears and blood.
    Through kisses and fucks.




    Submitted on 2008-05-08 12:46:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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