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    dots Submission Name: For Madelainedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 826
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsFor Madelainedots
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    I met this Siren by a winding rill
    Her eyes were cool, her gaze so warm,
    She made the Earth itself and Time stand still,
    Could calm a storm.

    Her huge green eyes so like the moiling sea
    Where foaming white-capped breakers seethe,
    Her scented hair so like mahogany,
    I could not breathe.

    And she is sleek and sly and like the night
    Where all the nubile wild nymphs fare,
    Her beauty puts the errant stars to flight
    In perfumed air.

    She moves like one so filled with love and grace,
    Her loveliness I cannot bear,
    And such a classic, pretty Sirenís face
    As angels share.

    She sat beside that rill and softly sighed,
    Clouds fled as might the frightened geese,
    And then I thought for sure that I had died
    I felt such peace.

    And who can say through beauty or through guile
    That such a one as she is now
    Might strike the Moon, damn up the Nile,
    Or kiss my brow?

    I met this Siren by a winding rill
    And in that day eternity,
    Vessel wherefrom your potent wine will spill
    I drink of thee!




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      once again, your work is wonderful, as always
    they rhyming is great, the way you describe everything is great, the words you use...all around it is wonderful

    -Bella
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this piece, it is so romantic and very well done. It makes me happy that you wrote this, and the eloquence is a hundred times more than I expected.
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      *Sigh*! Those Sirens! I am reborn many times, as often I have been tragically drowned pursuing those lovely creatures and being enticed by their call!!!!

    Outstanding work, my able friend in letters!!
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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