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    dots Submission Name: Glowing steam. dots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 606
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    dotsGlowing steam. dots
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    The glowing screen before me,
    Laying depths of touch ,
    A feeling that embraced me,
    A slight confusion of lust,
    Thereís a dripping of the soul,
    Sometimes dreaming, never much.
    Tortured light, burning blitz, Sun
    Glazed honey dew,
    Drip, Drip, Drip.
    Pouring outwards to the moon,
    Hazed, mazed, mused.
    Iíll sit typing staring at the screen
    Burning with a moment,
    A monumental steam,
    Streaming, creaming, burning flee.
    Burning dream, moment team,
    The rhyming words of -eam
    A poem written with shortened ease.
    The glowing screen in the back of my eyes.
    With a mourning light of my own
    Self demise.
    The glowing screen before me,
    Leave me mourning for a dream.




    Submitted on 2008-05-08 19:44:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like, it danced, it pranced, it flashed me it's... tight embrace ...Chisel it In Stone
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      The word play and assonance was very entertaining. The picture of writing in front of a computer about words was very appealing choice.
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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