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    dots Submission Name: Fall Apart.dots
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    Author: SaddenedSongbrd
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 7/22/37
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFall Apart.dots
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    I saw a girl fall apart once,
    I saw it in the mirror
    I saw her drop her head down,
    saw her shed a tear.

    Years and years I spent
    watching this girl fall apart
    many boys loved her,
    many broke her heart.
    Many times her father yelled
    many times she cut
    trying to relieve the pain
    of being called a slut.

    Now she is much older
    and I see her still
    I'm the catalyst of her pain
    she pops another pill.
    this will make her "pretty"
    this will help them see
    this will make her everything
    that she wanted to be.

    I see her now and then sometimes
    some days she stays in bed
    thinking it would be better
    just to wind up dead.
    Contemplating bruises,
    gashes and the sort.
    all she dreams of for her life
    is for it to be cut short.

    Now and then she'll smile
    mostly she just cries
    I've looked her in her eyes
    I've dissevered her lies.

    She isn't happy
    she really never will be
    because I know this girl better than anyone
    Because this girl is me.




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      You are very talented. I just read you other poem thinking that nothing could be better. Then I clicked on this. It's brilliantly written. Perfect flow and rhyme scheme. And I know what it's like to watch yourself fall apart. I sat back and watched my life go to [censored]--but that's besides the point.

    Now she is much older
    and I see her still
    I'm the catalyst of her pain
    she pops another pill.
    this will make her "pretty"
    this will help them see
    this will make her everything
    that she wanted to be.

    I love that part, it almost seems like it should be in an Evanescence song or something. :D

    Anyways

    Good write!
    +Faves

    Anna
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by Aethyx | [ Reply to This ]


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