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    dots Submission Name: Blue Octoberdots
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    Author: SaddenedSongbrd
    Elite Ratio:    2.16 - 7/19/27
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBlue Octoberdots
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    You open something inside of me
    with your words, they all just make sense
    they live somewhere deep down in my soul

    You were *our* music
    I turn it up loud, close my eyes
    and I'm in his car again.
    We are alive, and loving,
    and together.
    Sometimes I hate that
    the fact that you bring me back to the only time
    I was truly happy.
    In my head now,
    we are at your concert on my 18th birthday
    the situation was so perfect
    and so was he.

    I never had many instances
    in which I could truly relate to your words
    but now it seems as if
    you were the story makers and you didn't even know it
    Your lyrics were our plot
    that made all the scenes in our play
    of how we began, loved, fell apart

    I turn the music up louder
    to drown out these sorrowful screams
    Does he think of me when he's sitting there
    listening?
    Or has he forgotten about us completely?
    Your music is the only thing
    that could ever possibly bring
    us together again;
    blue october.




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      I liked reading this a lot. As I'm rereading it I wonder if the music is a metaphor, if it's actual music, or music made by him specifically. The expression of it all really makes me inspect it further and see the loveliness of it.
    -Q
    | Posted on 2008-05-10 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]


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