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    dots Submission Name: Wishdots
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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 580
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    dotsWishdots
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    I wish I could run back to you
    Pretend like nothing
    Went wrong.

    I wish I could hold your hand
    Let you take me
    Home again.

    I wish it could be so easy,
    To just go back
    Be normal
    Again.




    Submitted on 2008-05-10 09:42:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm. Well, I do think it has a good message. And of course the message is the most important ingredient to a poem.

    However, the lines seem abrupt and slightly unnatural. The ends just don't flow. It could use a little patch work.

    However, you did a good job of weaving it together.

    ~xoxo~
    Sweets
    | Posted on 2008-05-10 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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