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    dots Submission Name: Apathetic Disasterdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 725
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsApathetic Disasterdots
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    You'll hear of me flourish in my happy life
    Stories of bliss and joy with my new wife
    My kids will be happy, both one and two
    I'll love my career and never think about you

    We'll get along, my wife kids and me
    The role model of a happy family
    She will have what you could have in time
    No day will come when you cross my mind

    I'll steal a kiss before and after work
    Take them to the park before it gets dark
    We'll tuck them in and read to them every night
    My wife will tease me, "The kids are tucked in tight"

    This life was yours had you only asked
    Made a mistake, much time has passed
    Now you hear stories but you can't see for yourself
    Never come around; your name rings no bell

    I've worked hard to set my life right
    After that hell, you left me to die
    This is a dream; I'll see it come true
    It's a future first set for me and you

    So when I'm living happy with someone else
    And you're left behind back in my hell
    It'll cut you deep when I hold her tight
    Don't blame me when your world isn't right

    I hope it leaves marks and stains every page
    Of your life with regret for the mistakes that you made
    It's your own fault, at the seem your world will tear
    It's my own choice, I no longer care




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