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    dots Submission Name: Dear Mom and Daddots
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    Author: Fadeintoreality
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 33/114/64
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I wrote this when I was twelve, I was digging through old things and found my poetry book from when I was younger, enjoy.


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    dotsDear Mom and Daddots
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    Dear mom and dad,
    I am writing this to you, although you have died
    I wonder how you are doing
    If you know how much I've cried
    I watched you both die, and it tortured me to see
    For I was so younge, losing you killed me
    Now I sit and wonder, what the hell I am going to do
    I see so strong, but in reality thats not true
    I miss your voice dad, and its starting to fade away
    and I miss your touch mom, with my hair you used to play
    Pictures rush through my head one's of death and ones of life
    Do you know how many times mom? I cried your name into the night.
    I wish I could hold you both just for one more day
    Oh god, you have no idea what I would pay
    So I really cannot write much more, for I cannot see through my tears
    Just know how much I miss you both
    And will forever through the years.

    Your daughter




    Submitted on 2008-05-10 15:33:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This rings so true when someone you love dies
    peace & love
    | Posted on 2008-05-11 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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