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    dots Submission Name: like my bird risingdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotslike my bird risingdots
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    each elegant snap
    is the science
    of screaming
    into your appropriate ear
    all the little ghosts
    that dream about me
    as much as i dream
    of you.

    clever pricks
    belay the warm may
    that i fall into
    every day.
    but i still remember june
    & the options it brings
    for the methods of torture
    that i've let go.

    each moment
    is like the miracle of birds
    & an inherent physics
    that i've known.
    & even weathered feathers
    lose the bruises
    that they've shown..

    there's an agreeable honesty
    to my life
    that persuades lesser demons
    to loosen out of me
    like water through a flute.
    & i've known each second
    of living
    to be wrapped
    in some soft version
    of this sound.

    when everything is broken,
    & the sea that suns from my child eye
    beats to the palm of always,
    i'll wish that the mirror of forever
    is upon me
    like my bird rising.
    like words missing..
    like you...




    Submitted on 2008-05-10 17:47:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Birdman, I've always enjoyed the visceral connections your poems establish with me. This, like the ones I have read, is uncanny at it's - for the lack of a better word - tender violence.

    I like the whole thing. But if I have to choose a favorite, I have to pick the last stanza. It's just insanely gorgeous the way you scream for the gift of life.

    As always, I enjoyed the hypnosis of your talent. I wish I have time to read your other kids. And I wish other people would stumble into this pocket of your Universe.
    | Posted on 2008-05-15 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. you write with such feeling and honesty it seems. You have an original and beautiful stlye that mesmerizes.

    the fourth stanza is my favorite altogether, it just seems peaceful, very much like sitting on the edge of a dock, watching time float by, however my favorite individual lines are the last three of the whole poem. Very spiffy indeed.

    peace
    Maddie
    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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