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    dots Submission Name: In Amberdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIn Amberdots
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    Far from Triassic forests, in the glare
    Of that gigantic Sun that warmed strange seas,
    And continents of vast immensities,
    Trees rose two hundred feet into the air,
    Huge conifers almost beyond compare,
    Their amber saps trapped ants and flies and fleas,
    Mosquitoes, spiders and odd honey bees,
    And caught these ancient insects unaware.

    Is not our love, my dear, like such as these,
    A pretty piece of jewelry in the hand,
    Like some porcelain from the Japanese,
    A kiln-dried urn they polished in the sand?
    So very pretty and full of allure,
    Our amber love dead as the dinosaur.




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      it's got one of those endings that flips it completely around... uhm... like... wow... I am slowly becoming addicted... Chisel it In Stone...
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      Very mystic and colorful! I've never heard love compared to Amber, but it's a delightful muse! I like how the time span wanders from the Triassic to the present, comparing love to a jewel whose antiquity could date into the millions of years!
    | Posted on 2008-05-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Great work! Like always. The third line in the second stanza reminds me of a poem I've read but I can't remember right now.
    | Posted on 2008-05-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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