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    dots Submission Name: Darkness can be Whitedots

    Author: Nathaufein
    ASL Info:    16, Male, Dallas TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 6/5/9
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       A villainelle poem written as an opposing view to Dylan Thomas' poem "Do no go gentle into that good night".

    It has the exact same rhyme scheme.

    Hope you like it.

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    dotsDarkness can be Whitedots

    Death in darkness is the rite,
    Let your soul depart decay,
    From thine darkness rises pure white.

    All life ends eternal, so save Death spite.
    Tis' serenity to soar to the heavens in all array;
    Death in darkness is the rite.

    All men must see at last breaths plight
    that to struggle from end is to insanity stray;
    From thine darkness rises pure white.

    To you old man, life has become trite.
    Release yourself, or live with body that will betray.
    Death in darkness is the rite.

    Life near death is no delight,
    But begone to heaven and see its great display.
    From thine darkness rises pure white.

    Those you leave behind just may rebel against death incite,
    But you’ve done that all your life. Alight to the sky, be free and play.
    Death in darkness is the rite,
    From thine darkness rises pure white.

    Submitted on 2008-05-11 19:00:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this, a good poem about death that doesn't go emo half way through. After all, nothing is sadder then someone whose lived life and is still trying to fight against time. I also love how this compares to the original poem, which is also a favorite of mine and so might account for my loving yours so much. Hope to see more by you soon :)
    | Posted on 2008-05-12 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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