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    dots Submission Name: I Need Youdots
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    Author: MinervaBlu
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 152/163/133
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 54
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    dotsI Need Youdots
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    Late at night, as I try to sleep
    I hug my pillow tight and begin to weep
    I wish and wish for you to be here
    But magic isn't real, there goes another tear
    I could spend every minute with you
    But it'd still not be enough, what am I to do?
    A million kisses and a thousand hugs
    More, please, more. You're like a drug
    Your smile, more beautiful than the sky
    You make me feel like an angel I want to fly
    Your eyes are so deep, I could swim
    You fill me love right over the brim
    I've never felt like this before
    Please my love, walk through the door
    And relieve me from this awful pain
    Wipe away the tears that fall like heavy rain
    I need to be held in your embrace
    I need to you kiss me all over my face
    I need you right here by my side
    To over come this oncoming tide
    Waves and waves of terrible sorrow
    I need you before the light of tomorrow




    Submitted on 2008-05-11 23:10:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice. I thought you wrote it rather well, and I know exactly what you feel. apparently thats been going around latly lol girls all feeling the same. Keep up the good work!!!!
    | Posted on 2008-05-21 00:00:00 | by twistedchick | [ Reply to This ]
      nothing could be nicer than the release of the feeling that he makes you feel, im now in the same boat so this really spoke to me and I thought it was grand.
    Good write

    Denise
    | Posted on 2008-05-14 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]


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