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    dots Submission Name: I Saw dots

    Author: BlueTorcher
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 79/97/96
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I havent written anything in a while so unfortunatly i need all the advice i can get so hesitantly i say "LAY IT ON ME"

    thanks ahead of time and later

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    dotsI Saw dots

    I saw the world through your eyes
    Left speechless, almost
    When I saw the wisdom and intelligence
    That courses through our soul

    I saw the world through your eyes
    And saw everything I couldn't
    Watched as angels; sang your name
    Then laid kisses on your cheek

    I saw the world through your eyes
    Amazed at its splendor
    As its beauty began to unfold
    Unveiling all its wonders

    I saw the world through your eyes
    And not only saw, but felt love
    As I continued to whisper
    Sweet nothings to you

    I saw the world through your eyes
    And thought I'd seen it all
    Until I returned your eyes
    And saw you standing tall

    Submitted on 2008-05-12 20:15:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow.......i really liked it......seems as if you really feel strongly about someone. This writing just somehow kind of connected to me personally......
    Well good job and keep writing..........This was a very strong piece!
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by Blackphoenix14 | [ Reply to This ]

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