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Submission Name: I Saw dots

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Author:	BlueTorcher
Elite Ratio:	4.67 - 79/97/96
Words:	125

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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I havent written anything in a while so unfortunatly i need all the advice i can get so hesitantly i say "LAY IT ON ME"

thanks ahead of time and later

I Saw

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I saw the world through your eyes
Left speechless, almost
When I saw the wisdom and intelligence
That courses through our soul

I saw the world through your eyes
And saw everything I couldn't
Watched as angels; sang your name
Then laid kisses on your cheek

I saw the world through your eyes
Amazed at its splendor
As its beauty began to unfold
Unveiling all its wonders

I saw the world through your eyes
And not only saw, but felt love
As I continued to whisper
Sweet nothings to you

I saw the world through your eyes
And thought I'd seen it all
Until I returned your eyes
And saw you standing tall

Submitted on 2008-05-12 20:15:05 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Wow.......i really liked it......seems as if you really feel strongly about someone. This writing just somehow kind of connected to me personally......
Well good job and keep writing..........This was a very strong piece!
| Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by Blackphoenix14 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.