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    dots Submission Name: Red Rosedots
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    Author: marray proetus
    ASL Info:    100/F/no where
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 24/32/30
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsRed Rosedots
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    Red rose

    Nothing lasts forever
    The red rose withers
    As the strings of fate sever
    You and me or no longer the same
    We are separate, apart and bitter

    One day we had decided to depart
    Not because our love was lost
    But because it was a painful dart
    On our black hearts

    But this red rose keeps us together
    Though it is dying
    It will hold my memories of you forever
    I loved you more than any
    I will forget you never




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