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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: marray proetus
    ASL Info:    100/F/no where
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 24/32/30
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 802
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 369



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    dotsAlonedots
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    Tears flow down my cheeks
    as the car runs through
    the dusty and ghostl streets
    The moon shines bright and
    seems like my only companion
    on this sleepless night of
    faraway family and friends

    Though I'm not completely alone,
    there is a sadness
    In my hear that can never
    be removed




    Submitted on 2008-05-12 21:00:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       I feel that this poem could have a lot more things in it as well as length. It seems just a little too short for me but it has a great start. My favorite lines are: Tears flow down my cheeks
    as the car runs through
    the dusty and ghostly streets.
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    Keep it up! So far so good ;)
    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by Moon2thestars | [ Reply to This ]


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