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    dots Submission Name: Start Anewdots
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    Author: dreamer37517
    ASL Info:    25/F/Bama
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 161/149/49
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 995
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 503



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    dotsStart Anewdots
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    Todays the day
    The demon dies.
    Misery ends
    And chaos subsides.

    A world burnt black
    By sorrows fire,
    Now brillianty shines
    With new found desire.

    A lost soul
    An aimless wanderer,
    Finds the way
    Lost now longer.

    A heart once broken
    Now slowly heals.
    Begins to beat,
    Begins to feel.

    The time of pain
    Now aged away.
    This new life
    Begins today.




    Submitted on 2008-05-12 21:38:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ahh it's always nice to see the triumph of a new beginning. Rise out of the ashes young phoenix and burn the sweet brightness of a new day. Nice inspiration, thanks.
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This is a sweet and simple piece, with just enough feeling to communicate the mood, without drowning the reader in emotions they don't understand. Only one real critiscism.

    In the third stanza, first line, I believe you meant to put soul, but you actually put "sould"
    I figured it was just a typo, so I thought I would let you know.

    Peace
    Maddie
    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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