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    dots Submission Name: new kid at school dots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 332
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsnew kid at school dots
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    New kid at school

    My footsteps echo
    as I walk down the marble hall
    it is the only sound
    that I hear

    I don't hear all
    the voices chatting
    the lockers slamming
    I don't see the people crowding

    Nor do I notice
    the lockers have
    stopped slamming
    or the people
    stop chatting

    The people start staring
    asking who's that and
    look at his clothes

    How could he wear that here

    My footsteps stop
    as I find my locker
    I feel hundreds of eyes
    all staring at me

    Waiting for me to make a mistake

    People laugh as my locker opens
    and pictures fall to the floor

    People close to me say
    what a geek they are all horses
    and pictures of family;

    They scatter like mice as the
    bell tolls
    that anoying clamor

    all except for one person
    who asked do you need help
    finding your class?

    I shake my head
    to and fro
    As the tears start
    to fall sliently
    from my face

    The person turns away
    I start to say
    I do need
    he nods his head
    and says I though you
    might

    My name is Ben and you must be
    The new kid at school

    Benjamin Hutzler




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    ||| Comments |||
      I love new people!

    I make friends with them and then I recruit them for my evil purposes!

    Good write...

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-05-18 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, we really don't like new kids around eliteskills. Especially ones with funny accents. Watch out boy!
    :)
    | Posted on 2008-05-15 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      we dont take kindly to new kids around here... said the big bully with bulging body...

    hehe

    All i can is this was a easy work to read through... flow was good due to the simplicity of the words used.

    Good work
    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]


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