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    dots Submission Name: goth grrrl: labeled and provokeddots
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    Author: Syn
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 115/136/83
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Prose/Dark
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    dotsgoth grrrl: labeled and provokeddots
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    goth grrrl, goth grrrl
    labeled and provoked
    you dare to stare at my darkened eyes
    insolence attempted and failed, failed
    please don't tease the:
    goth grrrl, goth grrrl
    labeled and provoked
    i cursed his name as he departed my sight
    blood on the pavement and an absent pulse
    and his last breath regrets the day he said:
    'goth grrrl, goth grrrl'
    ...labeled and provoked





    Submitted on 2008-05-13 03:27:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I could picture this written by a daughter of Edgar Allan Poe. The repetition of the words adds to a slow build up to the conclusion of the piece which worked out well within the length of the poem.

    One has to like the irony, though, of a girl who dislikes the idea of being labeled "goth grrl" yet writes in a very "goth grrl" style. I'm just saying. ;)

    ~Musing
    | Posted on 2009-02-04 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
      Not bad at all
    In this write you showed us your readers something that I have always believed very strongly
    WORDS DO HURT
    I beg anyone reading this to Please
    THINK BEFORE YOU SPEAK
    Some people have a very thin skin and words of hurt stay with them and hurt them continuously throughout their life
    This is why I Believe the rate of teen suicide and suicide overall only keeps going up
    Its like my Mom used to tell me
    IF YOU DONT HAVE SOMETHING NICE TO SAY ABOUT SOMEONE THEN DONT SAY ANYTHING
    Those words our so true
    Thank You for Sharing what I believe is an extremely important write!!!!

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow goth grrrl The was very dark...I like
    The dark intensty and the evil ora.
    This poem can only be felt by those that have the soul of darkness or whatever
    Very nice goth grrrl

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    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]


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