goth grrrl: labeled and provoked

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goth grrrl: labeled and provoked

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goth grrrl, goth grrrl labeled and provoked you dare to stare at my darkened eyes insolence attempted and failed, failed please don't tease the: goth grrrl, goth grrrl labeled and provoked i cursed his name as he departed my sight blood on the pavement and an absent pulse and his last breath regrets the day he said: 'goth grrrl, goth grrrl' ...labeled and provoked

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I could picture this written by a daughter of Edgar Allan Poe. The repetition of the words adds to a slow build up to the conclusion of the piece which worked out well within the length of the poem. One has to like the irony, though, of a girl who dislikes the idea of being labeled "goth grrl" yet writes in a very "goth grrl" style. I'm just saying. ;) ~Musing

| Posted on 2009-02-04 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]

Not bad at all In this write you showed us your readers something that I have always believed very strongly WORDS DO HURT I beg anyone reading this to Please THINK BEFORE YOU SPEAK Some people have a very thin skin and words of hurt stay with them and hurt them continuously throughout their life This is why I Believe the rate of teen suicide and suicide overall only keeps going up Its like my Mom used to tell me IF YOU DONT HAVE SOMETHING NICE TO SAY ABOUT SOMEONE THEN DONT SAY ANYTHING Those words our so true Thank You for Sharing what I believe is an extremely important write!!!! Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You God Bless Ron

| Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

Wow goth grrrl The was very dark...I like The dark intensty and the evil ora. This poem can only be felt by those that have the soul of darkness or whatever Very nice goth grrrl [ LATER ]

| Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]

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