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    dots Submission Name: Didn't Youdots
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    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDidn't Youdots
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    Didn't you listen?
    He was calling for the birds?
    He was waiting for the crows?
    He was looking at the trees, and the rustling leaves?

    Didn't you see his smile?
    Beneath those lovely eyes?
    And he lights up
    Whenever he sees you walking by

    Didn't you care at all?
    When he begged on his knees
    Praying for security
    When you let him walk free
    How could you leave him be?




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