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Nowhere


Author: N0shin
Elite Ratio:    1.3 - 42 /26 /15
Words: 87
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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tough times....


Nowhere



Today;
wake up in my bed
Feel my fears,
cry my tears
Try my heart
and hear all it hears.
When the beats fail to wake you up;
When you are too drawn to surface here;
When you are too wounded to bleed there;
When your wings are too broken to fly up high;
When you are too unclean to be buried.
Then it leaves you to go nowhere.
So you know
while in my skin you burn,
All that's gone is never to return.





Submitted on 2008-05-13 12:57:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i understand how u feel...i understand the emotions behind the poetry...and the metaphors are aptly chosen chery!

this surely is another gr8 write up of urs...i wish the one who is the reason behind these emotions of urs reads this and gets to understand what he is doing to u...

"When your wings are too broken to fly up high;
When you are too unclean to be buried.
I promise i'll be by your side
To make your problems MINE...to not let you be worried!

"Today;
wake up in my bed
Feel my fears,
cry my tears
Try my heart
and hear all it hears."

-This is how u feel and this what u say...
Like it or not ima be there for u...when it hurts
When there are no arms to calm u down...to hugh u tight...
Ima hold u through the night!

i love u baby...thanx for sharing how u feel...

| Posted on 2008-05-18 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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