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My kingdom


Author: Polydectes
ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
Elite Ratio:    7.84 - 154 /85 /38
Words: 33
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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My kingdom



A place of mine,
A thought, a rhyme.
Thick children's wit,
Mislead by site.
Their childlike mitt

This place of mine,
Expression's shrine.
Fewer adroit,
Losing its site,
The more the voids




Submitted on 2008-05-14 08:58:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  speaking like a true king. standing for what you believe. strong piece.
| Posted on 2008-07-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
  We must hang in there (and here at this site) and do what we can to keep expression alive rather than accept that void. You always have a great message and a clever style of expression. Good work, Sharon
| Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  Stem saam met realpoet en ook met Madelaine. Iewers glip die werklike insig effens in die skemer vir my. Vertrou die ouers vra het goed verloop. Die chatango ding werk nie vir my nie. Groete Joachim.
| Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
  Stick with it Man ! Never leave nor lose that home. As you say, with loss of site there are more the voids.
As the poem says, home is where thought,rhyrthm and observation are the makings of happiness. Lean into it man, become childlike as you say.
| Posted on 2008-05-14 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmm, not really sure I understand what's going on here, maybe you could help me out?

Maddie
| Posted on 2008-05-14 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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