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    dots Submission Name: world musicdots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 362
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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    flying like paper, and high like a plane
    casting voodoo with a rhythm to mask all the pain
    itís all a game, one that should never be played
    but participation is required to keep the mind sane
    but blame, the shame, can you feel its rain?
    can you understand something so complex that its plain?
    the agony, trust in me, I feel it throb in every part of the beat
    that keeps me going, keeps me throwing out notes
    that wrap me in a symphony, the only antidote
    for this choke, I feel around my neck
    the hands that hold it I have yet to let
    go off, hands I once held with mine
    now stop my breathing, my reason, my rhyme
    but I wont stop believing in the power of time
    to heal, cause I feel thatís whatís real
    ill find it, and all will be revealed
    then ill peel, inch by inch
    every layer, every question
    that lies under my skin
    I wont flinch
    even as the blood drips
    to dry on the sidewalk
    chalked up by little kids
    that canít imagine anything but right now
    and that are faithful, without a single doubt
    to the possibility of possibilities, to all they can dream
    cause little kids know life is what you make it seem
    and they do know strife, but continue to believe
    instead of adults, who only tend to grieve
    but the rhythm, the magic of its melody
    gives voices to the mute, and allow the dead to breathe
    and they rise up, to sway to its sound
    raising up their corpses, still rotting from the ground
    where theyíre buried, under taxes and laws
    buried so deep they forgot where they was
    ferried like sheep, they forgot who they were
    until across the world, the melody was heard
    through a glance, began the endless romance
    all was forgotten, the memories crashed
    the drunk sobered, the war was all over
    music played out of speakers, school bleachers,
    out of the bongs of tokers
    and when it peaked, lightning slashed
    the prayers flying like balloons
    looking for another second chance
    instead, they concluded they should all just dance




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      Sort of humorously sincere. No preaching but only observation. I thought I had become a child through this read. GOOD WRITE!
    | Posted on 2008-05-14 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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