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    dots Submission Name: A box of youdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA box of youdots
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    A box full of pieces of paper,
    each one significant,
    in its delicate way,
    with words bled out onto paper,
    our love etched out onto paper,
    each word I read before slumber.

    You promise me the world,
    when all I want is you,
    in sickness and health,
    is happiness and hurt,
    you are my world,
    everything spins around you.

    I attempt to grasp what I feel for you,
    and put it into words,
    know that these words only carry a small fragment,
    of how much I love you.




    Submitted on 2008-05-14 19:01:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nothing is ever enough to express how much we love them, but they suffer the same dilemma don't they? Chisel it In Stone
    | Posted on 2008-05-26 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      But as a writer words should explain everything

    But i know what your getting at.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-05-18 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm... kinda simple for my taste, although I can somewhat relate to it. I have an old box too in which I keep stuff that I wrote. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2008-05-15 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      It has a touch of nostalgia and is very sweet. Paper is never quite enough.
    | Posted on 2008-05-14 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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