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    dots Submission Name: Without Youdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    17/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 251/238/190
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 74
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1698



    Description:
       I really want you to tell me the truth about this. Really evaluate it. I'm singing this in a ceremony at school, so i want everyone to help me fix it.

    Dedication: J.B.


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    dotsWithout Youdots
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    Every night, I cry myself to sleep.
    Just so I can see you in my dreams.
    I know that makes it even harder.
    Waiting for you is harder than it seems.
    When I see you walking by
    When I stop and try to hide
    the way you always make me smile.
    But you don’t pay me no mind
    Well boy, that is just fine.
    I know this will be over in a while.

    Don’t call me baby, don’t call me love.
    Don’t call me anything, I’ve had enough.
    Don’t call me beautiful, don’t call me cute.
    I’m doing just fine, without you, without you.

    Why do I always get this feeling
    Every time that you’re around me?
    When you’re with me, and look into my eyes
    Can you say there’s nothing you can see?
    When I stop and try to hide
    the way you always make me smile.
    But you don’t pay me no mind
    Well boy, that is just fine.
    I know this will be over in a while.

    Don’t call me baby, don’t call me love.
    Don’t call me anything, I’ve had enough.
    Don’t call me beautiful, don’t call me cute.
    I’m doing just fine, without you, without you.

    But why can’t I get you out my mind?
    So many times I wish that you’d be mine.
    When I stop and try to hide
    the way you always make me smile.
    But you don’t pay me no mind
    Well boy, that is just fine.
    I know this will be over in a while.

    Don’t call me baby, don’t call me love.
    Don’t call me anything, I’ve had enough.
    Don’t call me beautiful, don’t call me cute.
    I’m doing just fine, without you, without you.




    Submitted on 2008-05-15 09:51:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow you wrote this.
    thats amzing.
    I like it eveN though I have no idea how you are talking about but still very nice.

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    | Posted on 2008-05-15 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]


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