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    dots Submission Name: Burnt Out The Sundots
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    Author: Voodoo_Lounge
    ASL Info:    21/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408/588/171
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBurnt Out The Sundots
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    I can't figure out how I feel today,
    Or what I've become,
    It's just that I'm contented now-
    But still I feel the numb.
    Since you saved me from the quicksand,
    I surrendered to your will,
    So long after I yielded-
    Under your spell always and still....
    This feels so strange
    To be lost in someone,
    Though this love consumes all
    It might have burnt out my sun.
    How I love this man
    Even with these dishpan hands.




    Submitted on 2008-05-15 12:27:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice and sort of amusing, I love the metaphors
    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by gjenkins | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem made me want to vomit and star sobbing at the same time. Its amazing how you capture things so vividly, aptly, and honestly, without the wording coming off as trite. God, I know exactly what you are getting at, especially the last four lines. You hit home, and ouch.
    | Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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