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    dots Submission Name: come find medots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1043
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1057



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    dotscome find medots
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    ...hidden for so long
    I'm ready
    come find me
    1234567
    I'm ready
    Search high and low
    where I am you don't know
    come and find me

    ...it's been awhile
    and I hide here still waiting
    Listened around me
    but no ones around me
    Did you search high and low
    did you know where to go
    didn't find me
    will you find me

    I guess you gave up
    though you counted to twenty
    Guess that you looked
    but you still couldn't find me
    oh where have you gone
    have you searched for too long
    to find me
    Now I'm alone
    and I'm hiding in fear now
    You should have looked here
    too late you're gone now
    and it's me alone now
    where have you gone
    come find me
    come find me

    ...
    why did you leave me
    come back to me
    love me
    ready or not here I come
    please be ready




    Submitted on 2008-05-16 19:26:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was pretty good...i really liked the middle of it all...it was very...i don't know how to say it...realistic?....like i could feel what you were...but i will say one thing...as i always do so don't be offended from what i say...i thought the beginning could have been a bit better...like you could have been more on starting up the game and then in the end said that you've been hidden for so long...because when you said that first...it gives away the ending and makes it less interesting to read.....and then the ending kinda just fell off of a cliff...if you know what i mean...it was kinda dry and ordinary...you should have said something about how they left and what might have been the reason but here you come ready or not or something along those lines...but all together it was tasteful...and i enjoyed it
    | Posted on 2008-05-17 00:00:00 | by taintedsmiles | [ Reply to This ]


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