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    dots Submission Name: Immortal Minddots

    Author: sunsetserenity
    ASL Info:    21/f
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 23/17/12
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 606
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       I know I'm not the only one who has become so lost and engrossed in a good book or movie, that when it was over, I was disappointed that I had to go back to living... normally.


    Any cristicism or encouragement is welcome.

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    dotsImmortal Minddots

    I want to drown inside another story.

    Swallow me up until my own existence
    has become that of which I am reading.
    I want to disappear within the words of kingdoms,

    Of elves,
    and of wizards.

    Of good conquering all evil.
    Of evil conquering all good.

    My eyes have been plucked out, and I am blind to that which surrounds me.
    My emotions have dried up as thirsty lands.
    And my mind has taken its journey to far, far worlds of another time,
    yet my body remains at this mortal stand.

    Speak to me, I am silent.
    Touch me, I am cold.

    Let me be, for I am dead.

    Submitted on 2008-05-18 15:18:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i could hug you. LOVE love love the subject! you had be going all the way up to the last three lines. they fell flat. sorry but it's true. the rest of this was great because i mean that's really how it works. it was believable.
    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

    In the beginning I was really feeling the poem because I thought I knew where you were going with it . Either i was wrong or i just completly understand the last verse of your work ... i mean it could be either way neither of us are perfect

    okay here is what I got from your poem, how you wrote the beginning it gave me the impression that when you read your mind completely goes blank and you are sucked in soul first into whatever your reading at the time

    "My eyes have been plucked out, and I am blind to that which surrounds me."

    to me it seems as if your saying that youve completly become blind to the world around you once again.......okay i THINK now i have some understanding of the last part if im right i believe your trying o say how you become dead to the world once you get wrapped up into a book ( i know the feeling...lol) but anyway

    all in all the poem to me was pretty good......it was deep without going that extra mile that would have made it great for me but yeah, all in all it was a pretty decent piece of work . hope you keep up the writing


    - b.t.w. sorry for any spelling errors kinda in a hurry
    | Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]

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