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    dots Submission Name: The Familydots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 951
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       Give it your best shot ES


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    dotsThe Familydots
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    I sit myself down in my old comfy chair.
    Its soft seat now worn down and bare.
    I watch as the Jester pokes fun
    at the gestures and rhythms
    of the dead and or dying.
    She communes with a sheak,
    Whom we'd all like to meet,
    Just to keep herself from further crying.
    Nobody knows why her tears never show,
    and that smile keeps glowing, radiantly so,
    but regardless of nature, I think we all know
    that our family is special, especially though.

    There are angels falling from the sky,
    and shadows cast by highly heavens.
    Rose petals float on idly by.
    Man, times like these are trying.
    The essence of life is all about timing
    and speaking your mind, rather than miming
    its all about planting your feet hard in the ground
    and holding on tightly as your world is unwound.
    This is OUR place, our haven, our shrine,
    Its like a restaurant where we come to dine
    where the food is served hot
    and picky or not
    we all leave feeling fulfilled.

    It's like the melodies of buzzing bees
    that sting and fly by big oak trees
    where together they all buzz and buzz
    and all their voices turn to fuzz
    that makes your head ache and spin.
    But bit by bit, piece by piece,
    one by one, and week by week.
    You learn a bit about each one.







    Submitted on 2008-05-18 19:20:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, reading the other comments, it's rather clear what this is about. Though, it took me a second read over to actually find out for myself, I'm too dense sometimes. Since I can't actually comment on the meaning, since I'm not actually a regular, I will comment on something remarkable I noticed...

    That rhyme scheme.

    Seriously man, it makes me green with envy, I can't rhyme for [censored] and it seems like that came so easily with this.

    Viva La Revolucion
    -Max
    | Posted on 2008-07-12 00:00:00 | by Max Million | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahahaha
    I rock almost as much as ES does
    The old chatroom was much better, when only ES'rs could join in, and it wouldn't keep opening up itself. Oh well, its still great in its way

    Thanks for including me, even if it was instinctive

    Abbas
    | Posted on 2008-05-19 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting subject choice amigo.

    You baffle me, in all the right ways.

    I enjoyed this, and not just because I'm stuck in the middle of it, it's an interesting delve into something oddly enough, not written about as commonly as would be likely.

    Considering everyone enjoys a good chat once in awhile.

    We certainly are a disfuntional bunch.

    But that lends credence to our insanity.

    Nobody would believe us if we didn't have as many of us to back it up.
    | Posted on 2008-05-18 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this so much. I can't even tell you how much.
    | Posted on 2008-05-18 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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