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    dots Submission Name: Semi-Conscious Dreamsdots

    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSemi-Conscious Dreamsdots

    I close my eyes,
    My mind alive,
    Impending sleep,
    Is slowly creeping
    Into me.
    I see a man
    Arms outward
    Grasping tightly
    To my legs,
    My arms.
    Carrying me.
    I want to sleep,
    I want to rest.
    “Why must I be taken?”
    I whisper keenly.
    I hope,
    My love
    Is clutching me
    I hope it is his arms
    That pull me close.
    His face, unclear,
    I scan his brow.

    It is not him!
    I scream and kick
    I jolt around,
    I want to be free
    To fall on ground.
    “Let me be!”
    I scream to him.
    Let me run back,
    To beds soft sling.
    His eyes, his lips,
    His foul smell
    I swiftly change his face
    In semi-consciousness
    I retrace,
    A disguise of sister, brother,
    Lover, mother, father,
    They slowly mold,
    Take form.
    Until one by one they burn.
    Perfect pictures fall,
    Like lit papers,
    Browning, crisping,
    Until mere ashes
    Cover once still ground.
    “Save me!”
    I yelp.
    “Help me!”
    Lungs tighten
    Breathe harder,
    I awaken.
    A semiconscious dream.
    Of which,
    I couldn’t be more shaken.
    Afraid to sleep.

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