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    dots Submission Name: Our Lovedots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 438
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 806
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2177



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    dotsOur Lovedots
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    For purpose sakes pretend that you love me, and I will be all right .
    Don't lie to me however, I want to know the truth of our relationship.
    I have loved you for a lifetime and my remaining time will be the same.
    Have I touched a part of your life with me at all, did you love it?
    I know that I loved it, it was my shining moment in life, I remember.
    I wish you would open your feeling and let me know the truth.
    Tears they have fallen and I have tried to catch them in my hand.
    Nevertheless, it is like the sands of time, they run through my fingers.
    I cannot stop them as they fall, so I cry more, I cannot stop the tears.
    I want to see the truth I want to know it. Was I happy or was I sad?
    Could have been all that I know to be truth. I never seen the truth.
    What were we, was we together or was we always apart even in love?
    Were our moments just fractures of time that we managed to slip into existence?
    Secrets that were not to be told, glances that were not to be seen, our love.
    Was it real or was it a moment of truth that I seen now as a lie everyday?
    A dream that I slip in to at night hoping to see the truth in it for once.
    A lingering moment in my life that I cannot forget , that is you.
    Those were us, that is a moment that should be the truth but is forever a lie.
    For purpose sakes, lets pretend now that I never loved you, and I will be all right .
    I will lie however to myself, I don't want to know the truth of us.
    I have loved you for a lifetime and my remaining time will be the same.
    I have touched a part of your life and wish I knew if you loved it.
    I know that I loved it, and I was a moment in your life, I remember.
    You never opened your feelings, and I now know the truth of that reason.
    Tears they always fall like the sand of time; they are not stoppable.
    Even so, always like the sand I will forever have you running through my mind.
    Our moments of time and our existence our secrets will forever be,
    Our love.




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    ||| Comments |||
      This is so raw and full of feelings that so many of us have experienced before. The last line was perfect. It wrapped everything together nicely. Great job and it reminds me
    Of my featured piece a bit. A personal story of love that no matter, just wasnt meant to be. Thx

    Kase
    | Posted on 2014-04-09 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      So this started my tears again how I miss the guy I loved but never got the love returned
    | Posted on 2012-04-22 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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