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    dots Submission Name: A Promise Not To Keepdots
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    Author: Voodoo_Lounge
    ASL Info:    21/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408/588/171
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Promise Not To Keepdots
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    I come to the realization
    As I watch your chest rise and fall,
    That while you sleep beside me now
    One day you will not be, at all.
    I secured my own chains, bound my own rope,
    Mortality fails me when I watch you sleep
    Because I know that forever
    Is a promise not to keep.




    Submitted on 2008-05-19 11:50:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Kudos. The last two lines are a brilliant cap to a nice work. Not much more to say about it except fangirl raving. :)
    | Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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